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Partnering with CPA’s media relations team, our writers/editors cover internal events and edit pieces big and small from flyers to magazines to hardcover publications for clients at the University, including the Office of the President.

Writing Examples

Internal stories range from Employee of the Month ceremonies to major University events.

Editing Examples

Our editors, award-winning journalists who came to UMB from daily newspapers, can do cursory back-reads or total rewrites, whatever the client requires. 

University of Maryland, Baltimore 2018 Experts Guide

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Six Five UMB students have advancd advanced to the national finals in the Mobile Health Challenge. The contest, which that seeks to create the first mobile health app that encourages the use of information exchange standards among between disciplines, will culminate in Orlando, Fla., next January.

The event’s events’ winners will receive a $2,000 scholarship from the National Institutes of Health.

The UMB students include six here; five in lead Kara Daniels, Jackie Gelber, Tara Lebeau, Jenny Miller, Carly Sloane, and Rachel Tratner. They advanced after a regional tournament in in delete one ‘in’ Lancaster, Pa., Penn., in May.

Rewrite Examples

Original

Mark Brueckl, assistant director of the Experiential Learning Program in the School of Pharmacy thought he was attending X on April 6. Instead, President Jay A. Perman, MD, surprised him with UMB’s Employee of the Month Award.

Perman gave Brueckl a framed certificate and thanked him for taking his time to complete site visits to pharmacies throughout Baltimore. “Thank you for being such a good ambassador for the University.”

Brueckl, who also received $250 as the Employee of the Month for April, is described by Toyin Tofade, MD, as someone who “is a lifesaver on more than one occasion. He is willing to attend to matters on short notice and works extremely well with the team.” Brueckl is said to go above and beyond by applying his advanced data mining skills to help manage the copious amounts of student data that the office produces. “The organization is fortunate to have him and I certainly am fortunate to have him on my team,” says Tofade.

One of the many qualities that Tofade highlighted was Bruekle’s completion of more than 250 site visits since joining UMB in February 2014.

“In the past few years, the School of Pharmacy was struggling with rotation capacity for our students barely making the capacity numbers required by our accreditor. When Mark joined, he consistently made these visits and now we hear more positive feedback from our preceptors.” Through Brueckl’s visits, the School can now provide students with the best experiential learning experience.

Thankful for this award and his job, Brueckl stated, “It’s a task that I enjoy quite a bit – finding out what’s going on in the real world of Pharmacy.”

Revision

Mark Brueckl, RPh, MBA, has traveled countless miles in making more than 250 site visits since becoming assistant director of the Experiential Learning Program at the School of Pharmacy in February 2014.

Few of the trips involved stopping at the Office of the President, however. So he knew something was up even before UMB President Jay A. Perman, MD, entered the conference room carrying a plaque.

“Do you know why you’re here?” Perman asked. “I think so,” replied Brueckl, who was joined by former Employee of the Month xxx and xxxx.

Perman gave Brueckl a framed certificate and thanked him for taking his time to complete site visits to pharmacies throughout the state as part of the school’s largely successful preceptor program. “Thank you for being such a good ambassador for the University.”

‘Lifesaver’

Brueckl, who also received $250 as the Employee of the Month for April, is described by Toyin Tofade, PharmD, MS, BCPS, CPCC, assistant dean of experiential learning at the school, as someone who “is a lifesaver on more than one occasion. He is willing to attend to matters on short notice and works extremely well with the team.”

She said Brueckl goes above and beyond by applying his advanced data mining skills to help manage the copious amounts of student data that the office produces. “The organization is fortunate to have him and I certainly am fortunate to have him on my team,” says Tofade.

Site Visits

Brueckl was praised for demonstrating UMB’s seven core values of accountability, civility, collaboration, diversity, excellence, knowledge, and leadership during his travels. Plus his many site visits have improved the customer service component of the experiential learning rotations, an integral part of the school curriculum that constitutes more than 30 percent of PharmD students’ requirements.

“In the past few years, the School of Pharmacy was struggling with rotation capacity for our students barely making the capacity numbers required by our accreditor. When Mark joined, he consistently made these visits and now we hear more positive feedback from our preceptors,” says Tofade. Through Brueckl’s visits, the School can now provide students with the best experiential learning experience.

Thankful Winner

Brueckl embraces the travel. “It’s a task that I enjoy quite a bit — finding out what’s going on in the real world of pharmacy.”

And as for the award? 

“Quote to come”